Best chapter so far; I really like the way you capture the almost liberating feeling of knowing that the world is ending...and then the realization that no, life is still going to go on, only worse. I'm reminded of a scene from Sam Hughes' book Ed, when time travelers try to avert a war that's left the Earth in ruins:
"And the irony is - we got it as right as we possibly could have. But we didn't fully understand time travel. We had no guiding lights. We thought that by sending someone back in time to stop the war we could change history. It would all have been so perfect. To disappear and be replaced by a better world. I don't want to guess how many times we repeated the experiment when that didn't happen. Or what we did when we realized we were going to have to see our war through to the bitter end, alone."
My only quibble with the chapter is the final line: given the intent, the line needs to be as short as possible. "In the center was a single drop of blood". The words 'splotch' and 'crimson' don't add anything here. But it's a minor quibble. Good stuff, and I'm looking forward to how the story plays out.
Thank you! I am getting to your corrections (much appreciated for pointing them out). I just have been so focused on production that I haven't been able to get to editing. Gigaheroes started as my take on The Boys, but it's quickly come to mean something else to me. I'm working on the next five chapters, and I'll do my best to live up to expectations.
Best chapter so far; I really like the way you capture the almost liberating feeling of knowing that the world is ending...and then the realization that no, life is still going to go on, only worse. I'm reminded of a scene from Sam Hughes' book Ed, when time travelers try to avert a war that's left the Earth in ruins:
"And the irony is - we got it as right as we possibly could have. But we didn't fully understand time travel. We had no guiding lights. We thought that by sending someone back in time to stop the war we could change history. It would all have been so perfect. To disappear and be replaced by a better world. I don't want to guess how many times we repeated the experiment when that didn't happen. Or what we did when we realized we were going to have to see our war through to the bitter end, alone."
My only quibble with the chapter is the final line: given the intent, the line needs to be as short as possible. "In the center was a single drop of blood". The words 'splotch' and 'crimson' don't add anything here. But it's a minor quibble. Good stuff, and I'm looking forward to how the story plays out.
Thank you! I am getting to your corrections (much appreciated for pointing them out). I just have been so focused on production that I haven't been able to get to editing. Gigaheroes started as my take on The Boys, but it's quickly come to mean something else to me. I'm working on the next five chapters, and I'll do my best to live up to expectations.